Catch-A-Lot
Goal: to use speech marks properly.
On a misty morning Tim and son were out on a boat, looking for some fish to take home. After a few hours a big burst of water rose in the air!
Tim grabbed his spear and tossed one to his son (Tom). Tom sighed, Tim sized his shoulders "Aw come on, this could be a good catch, Come On!" he roared.
"But" Tim sputtered "but..."
"No buts, just get on with it!" Tim yelled madly. While they were arguing Bill (their pet seagull) had seen something behind them...
"Row the boat son!"
"Why do I have to, you're stronger?" Tom whined. Tim didn't answer he had just seen what Bill had seen.
"Don't move son, don't move"
"Why?" Tim turned and saw a giant beady eye staring evilly at him.
I like how you have used speech mark the right way I also like how you have used very exiting words. Next time maybe you could could make the story a bit longer.
ReplyDelete:) from Aylah bff